Very well done! Your fan from NW Ohio is all ears! Keep going one line at a time.
I met your Mom for a VERY brief time when visiting my Gram. She promised to put us in touch. I love to write, but I need direction. You definitely have direction and you need to keep at it!
Well, I would read it... that is an excellent start, keep going!
I'm close to 5 chapters in--alternating between present and past. Feeling a little awkward, but telling myself "who cares now?" :) Stay tuned.
Very well done! Your fan from NW Ohio is all ears! Keep going one line at a time.
I met your Mom for a VERY brief time when visiting my Gram. She promised to put us in touch. I love to write, but I need direction. You definitely have direction and you need to keep at it!
This reads like the opening scene of a play - really pacey, and such well-drawn characterisation right off the bat!
Thank you pointing out the dialogue. That’s my favorite thing to write!
Love the dialogue. Great hooks all around!